Friday, 19 December 2014

The Other List

“You do this one.
Screams and tears don’t bother you, right?
Good, you’ll see plenty tonight.
Quiet! Don’t wake the others.
The Boss don’t dirty his hands on this, just does the nice stuff, image conscious, see?
Hurt them? Hell, yeah, but that’s kinda the point. 
Now for the fun part.
There – the redheaded kid.
He’s gonna suffer alright.
Of course we have to, don’t wimp out!
He’s the reason we’re here.
An object lesson, the Boss calls it.
Yes, I’ve checked twice, like always.
Let’s show the little bastard what it really means to be on Santa’s naughty list!”

 100 words

This story was written for Loren Eaton's Advent Ghosts 2014 Drabble Event


  1. Hardboiled meets the holidays! This is great, Nick. I love the image of elves cracking the heads of naughty kids.

    Now I want to write something with Krampus in it ...

    1. Thanks Loren. A fun event and some great stories!

  2. Terrific story, Nick.
    SC's coming to town.

  3. LoL fun. As I started reading I thought, despite the title, it might be about Krampus, but then it quickly became clear that wasn't the case.

    Thank you for sharing.

    1. Thanks for taking time to comment Rhonda *rushes off to Google Krampus* :-)

  4. Love the take, excellent execution. I think Santa's gonna be busy this year.

  5. Those kids had it coming, I'm sure.

    Nice take on this.

  6. Love the sort of film noir quality this has.

    Great job!

  7. So the "lump of coal" thing isn't true, then?

    Nice work, Nick!