Saturday 29 December 2012

Hide in Plain Sight




Copyright Jean L. Hays
© Jean L Hays


Hide in Plain Sight

The man screamed and jerked as the cattle prods jabbed into him until he lay still.
The cloaked, hooded figures enveloped him like hungry crows, before grabbing his feet and dragging him into their black windowed van.
I leaned against my door jamb on shaking legs and watched another of my friends heading for repentance camp.
The Inquisitors were getting better at finding our sacred artefacts. I had told him simple concealment was no longer enough.
A shadow fell across my window. I froze, my hand seeking seemingly innocent contact with stained glass Air, Earth, Fire and Water.
I prayed.

100 words
@nickjohns999

This story was written for Rochelle Wisoff-Fields' Friday Fictioneers Challenge
 

16 comments:

  1. well done. my favorite are the ones that contain things that are not real, that don't exist.

    at least - not yet.

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    1. My whole life consists of things that are not real - yet!
      Thanks for visiting!

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    2. That's called being a writer, isn't it?

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  2. Isn't that what being a writer's all about?

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  3. Dear Nick,
    This is certainly a unique take on the prompt. Applause!
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle.
      Almost missed out on this prompt, as I have been out on a few emergency call outs over the holiday period. This one wanted to be a longer tale & it took me a little while to wrestle it into size! Thanks for hosting!

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  4. I've had that same wrestling match, Nick. Glad you hung in.

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  5. Glad I checked the links when I got in and saw your story. Hope your new year is much less distressing than this. :-)

    janet

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    1. Thanks Janet.
      I always try to make each New Year a good one, ever conscious that it's the only one I'm going to be able to make improvements in!
      :-)

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  6. Excellent; just the right amount of detail to tantalise and horrify. Glad you made it.

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  7. Well this was a surprise (welcome, I might add)... I'm thinking his concealment was in plain sight. Good one!

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    1. Thanks Ted.
      The four elements were my first thought when I saw the photo.

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  8. Dear Nick,

    This was well conceived. The touching of the elements, innocent yet potent, added the perfect ending to this tale.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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